A kiss of your lips,a guilty look in your eyes.
Your tight gripping fingers,
lost hopes realised.Sudden stroke of your thumband ashes of sorrow falls by.The light headed look,now you are floating in the sky.Let me be your failures.Let me be those lies.Let me be the key,to your lost paradise.The fire in my heart,is burning your pain.Let me be your last,promise me never again.Am I death?as the wise men say.Or just a nail,in the coffin of pain u lay.Lying on the roadside,crushed and bruised.I am dying your death,as u and another me walks away.-Me or my cigaretteP.S: I personally found it too rhyming for my comfort....lemme kno ur views :)
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kya babu moshai tum to ekdum saddy litrature likhne ke mission par nikal gaya hai...
and yes .. accha poem tha ... beautifully contemplated and written ..
Tht was good.. interesting...:) Cool blog...
@demoniac: yep...feelin lik writin saddy things nowadays... :(
thnkx....
@Lakshmi: hey thnkx...keep visitin :)
"Let me be your failures.
Let me be those lies.
Let me be the key,
to your lost paradise."
whoaaaaa...now that was something!!!
dark, broody n fag-scinating!
Whoa! Thats quite some senti attached to a cigarrete.Wonder why guys are so emo about em..:P:d
@blunt edges: fag-scinating...lolz...
interestin word i learnd...thnkx
yes..those r my fav lines too!! :)
@Madhu: yes....its kind of our alter ego!!
well we hate realities...and fags does da same fr us...so luv dem
Then all i can say is..GROW UP DUDE! And explore.Life is crazier that way!
wow someone said " GROW UP DUDE" to u...a nice one this time but still i will say "stop smoking"
@Madhu: dammit i will try growin up...but u sure it better dan fags....grown ups around me luks sooo fuckd up :P
@debarati: yea yea...i stopped smokin long ago...but evry time my fag makes a cry face and i give in!! :(
Okay.. u dont have to grow up..try growin ur senses a bit..:P:D smokin aint IN dude! Life sure is better without fags!
Nice..i loved it!
great poem ........it relly touches heart... I think this poem shud be brought forward in our instii so that guys are prompted to quit smokin .. goood initiative..
@Madhu: haha...sure i will try 2 get my senses bak....and graciously accptin defeat i will reduce smokin...cummon it will take time 2 completely stop...
btw y all women i come across in life so penchant in changin da whole male community wid pinchingly logical statements.... :O
@ Shanu: thnkx a lot... :)
@ rahul: thnkx fr commentin...and well i never thought it frm ur angle...will luk into it!!! :)
that was some poetry!!!! never knew dying ashes of a cig butt cud have so much of a meaning in it!!! that was some real job dude!!!!! nice one!
@bliss: yea wish dey cud speak den i suppose dey wud hav said sumthin similar...
welcome nd keep visitin...blogrollin u :)
they have logic right?? thats enough.And the female community is only tryin to get rid of some bad habits and make this world a happier place..atleast we dont think only abt ourselves..:P Nevertheless make an attempt i am sure u will succeed...glad u atleast decided to think bout it.See thats what we so called "females" do...blow u with words..:P
nice one, but i somehow cant see a cigarette as a tragic figure.
more like a clad in black harbinger of death for me
but nice work
Since it's my first time here, awesome username man !
Hmmm never read a poem like this before. From the point of view of the cig. Really good.
http://se-22.blogspot.com/2009/08/last-drag.html
Yes I am shameless. I couldn't resist !
@Raghav: understandable...but da fact is wen ur really pissed off wid life...it can really do wonders...
P.S: smokin is still injurious 2 health thou!!
@Post Script: yea..sum ppl really doubt my sanity fr lettin my ciggi tak!!!
btw...gr8 pic...but dont u luk...kinda dawg :P
@Madhu:yea!! nd psst...we male community is conspiring fr an early doomsday..
well abe dat blowing part ur rite...evry female in my life changed some habit of mine!!! :(
kind of depressing!! But I liked it.
soon we will change u completely...for the better..:P:d
jeez i can go on arguin with u for days!! :P:D
@Madhu: :O me runnin away scared!!!
yea...been a long time i hv full on argued wid someone!!!
now i m gonna post more controversial posts!!...so rolling up my sleeves....keep it coming!!!!
@Zeba: yea...blame it on da weather....i m turnin depressin day by day!!!
keep coming!!!!
Saw ur comments on a few blogs here and there, and d profile name intrigued me enuf to come visit :)
That was one kickass poetry dude! :) Felt like I was d one talking to my navycut :) Ahh!
@rimz: thnkx...and welcome to mah blog!!!
@Ms.A: ahh my profile name works to bring ppl here!!!
well only a person who truly lovd his/her cigarette cud understand da pain...
and i m not sayin dat loving somethin addictive is gud thing...but dats not how love works..isnt it!!
do keep coming!!
@every1 who was against cigarettes above..
those only give thoughts like these.. the post was enjoyable bcoz of that.. if u havent even smoked a fag still n yet u r advising then u better shut up..
nice one again dude.. esp "jus a nail in the coffin of pain u lay"
@Vishnu: yippie!!! finally sumone fighting on my side to justify da morale of da poem....thnkx
u hav to smoke it 2 kno it!!!
jus tellin the truth.. satyameva jayate.. lol..
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